Almost [liz]
The maddening complexity of almost
Torments and divides the brooding soul
Passionate energy smiles with words flowing together
He felt connection, his other
Almost, but never
The swing that could push her into youthful love
Had all the pieces but one
Words on a screen fill him with hope
Followed by an ever-widening silence
Almost true, but never real
He builds a barricade with brick
Almost waits, and waits, and waits alone
Liz, this is really, really simple and even beautitful in the isolation it communicates. Concise, and no wasting of words. I love it.
ReplyDeleteThis was amazing..I agree with Jessi, saddeningly beautiful and very concise. "almost true, but never real" stuck out for me. Great piece.
ReplyDeleteSimple, emotional new presentation of a common, sad story--good job.
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