September 11, 2009

Falling [nean]

Sun~drenched
days turn shimmering
gold to putrid brown
Crisped
air, crisped
fruit, crisped
leaves underfoot
As over~ripe
romance falls
dead from old
vines
Rerun
episodes aired
as premiere
Something less
nonchalant or
apathetic
On cooler wind
stirring darkening sky
Where soot~
stained comfort
warms wooden hearts
Slaves
to their freedom
are driven to learn
Wasting
these hours just
falling for you

7 comments:

  1. I wish I had something profound to say for this but I don't.

    I love it.

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  2. Lovely. Especially the first few lines.

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  3. I like "soot stained comfort warms wooden hearts."

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  4. See, Jenna, the end is my favorite. from "on cooler wind" on.

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  5. I get a sense of life and death in this poem--specifically, an indistinguishability between the two.

    I love it.

    "Where soot~/stained comfort/warms wooden hearts," I think is my favorite image.

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  6. Wow! That was awesome...

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  7. The end is definitely my favorite, pulls the whole thing together...well done

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