September 9, 2009

Era of Simplicity [liz]

If only we could be whole, undivided, true
Fight the conflict brewing in our separate hopes
You are a river and your silence a lie
Broken, sown, glued, and patched
We wait for the lines to fade

I've lived years that felt like four
And four that felt like one
I reached for your lone heart
And felt it beat for one short hour

Goodbye era of simplicity
Goodbye afternoons looking out your window
Goodbye my messenger of peace

6 comments:

  1. It's simple; I like it. I liked the "I've lived years that felt like four/And four that felt like one."

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  2. this is sad. not sure if it is a good or a bad sad.

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  3. I also liked "I've lived years that felt like.." You articulate the difficult concept of time very well. I really enjoyed this poem.

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  4. To be the copycat, the couplet that stuck out most to me was, "I lived years that felt like four/And four that felt like one."

    I can't entirely explain what I relate to in this piece, but I do relate. It makes me think of Freud's theory of the "Collective Unconscious," in that (although difficult to explain definitively) there is something universally true in this piece that we all inertly feel in our human experience.

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  5. wow...you said so much with so little. fav line: "You are a river and your silence a lie"

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  6. words are power... and the silence... equally powerful

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